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Capital punishment is a brutal decision and should be abolished. Give your views if you agree or disagree with it.
At present, it is undeniable that the crime is likely to increase and several forms of punishments have been put forward to solve the problems. One of the penalties which most people believe it to be brutal is capital punishment. From my perspective, this method seems to be a cruel judgment for a wrongdoer.
No matter Whether or not someone do has done something wrong, especially mirror issues, the death penalty should not be used for making decision. It look is ruthless because this sentence kills one’s take a life. They are do not only have an opportunity to re-sit rehabilitate themselves. Therefore, capital punishment is not the best option to judge a case. On the contrary As a matter of fact, it makes social society awful, people feel apprehendsive and do not want to do anything. This is because they are afraid that their action may leads to serious problems and end up with the death sentence.
Besides, not only does the death penalty look cruel, but it is also unfair for petty criminals doing committing mirror problems acts such as stealing, brawling and so on. Some actions of delinquents may are not serious issues and bring about capital punishment. Therefore, to make one punishment has have a line of reasoning and not brutalise be considered excessive, judging and punishing someone should act appropriately maintain the human rights of. For example, the judge ought to separate the level of penalty in order to give a fairness for wrongdoers.
However, it is true that the execution can stop individuals from committing affiances. People may be afraid of doing something wrong and more consider more about their actions. Moreover, this process may also help police do their job easily because a society has a strong low to decrease crimes.
Having discussed my ideas, even though this punishment can lead to a peaceful society and the number of criminals decreases, capital punishment seems not to be appropriate in every cases. I still hold on my position that the death sentence is still ruthless because someone has to die to compensate for their mistake. Therefore, this kind of punishment should be considered deliberately in depth and concern about in terms of ethics and morality.
(Estimate IELTS Band Score: 6.0)
IELTS Examiner Comments this is quite a long essay and your arguments are a little off. The statement asks for the abolishment of the death penalty and you argue that it should not be used in minor cases. Also, as you can see, there are quite a lot of minor errors, which I really hope you study and learn from. Keep up the good work and fix those errors.
IELTS Institute Team
