Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent.
Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.
Being an excellent parent is not very easy. Therefore, there are many “How to” books regarding raising babies and children available on the market. Even though these books can help a father or mother to take care of a baby, it is not enough to gain some skills which have to be learned from practice such as breast feeding, baby bathing, monitoring its need, and so on. Thus, some people believe that it would be wonderful if the schools could provide a course for teenagers to prepare themselves before having kids. I absolutely agree with this statement and I will also provide some necessary qualities for being a good parent in this essay.
Even though we can raise our kids with common sense, it does not mean they are treated in the appropriate way. Therefore, learning how to treat kids is very important. I have seen many young citizens who did not have knowledge about this and they have had to cope with
the complicated situations. Of course, dealing with uncertain circumstances does not only effect parents but also impacts to their baby’s emotion. On the other hand, youths who were educated about taking care of babies would not be nervous about this responsibility and their kids were happy and healthy. [For example, my younger sister, who had trained to be a good parent for 1 year can treat her baby very well.]— very weak example… How?
According to my educational which is nursing science, I may suggest two skills for anybody who would like to be a terrific parent: Firstly, emotional skills
which are the most important because parents have to deal with many negative behaviour from their babies. Therefore, they have to learn how to control their emotion to not harm their kids. Secondly, physical skills which are as important as the aforementioned skills because parents will know what kind of nutrition will be beneficial for their children and also can encourage them to have beneficial exercise to strengthen their bodies.
To sum up, I strongly believe that it would be beneficial for youth to learn how to be a good father and mother from schools. Therefore, this discussion should be concerned in our society to make it happen in
IELTS Examiner’s Comments :
You have some excellent elements in your writing that hopefully on the exam you can duplicate. What I suggest is not to make your writing too formal and instead use more natural language (ie. Collocations). Your “example” in the 1st body paragraph is really weak and is clearly just stuck on the end. This would lose you ½ band on the exam, so develop your ideas and support with proper examples. Don’t make such a run-on introduction. Get to the thesis statement and body paragraph quickly.