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It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional culture must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible. You can’t have both together. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Nowadays, everyday living must adapt to change since technology has developed this world. Technophiles believe technology is a good thing for people because it makes life easier. However, some try to avoid technology in life, as in their views, technology is a two-edged sword for humanity, especially traditional culture. This essay will express the side effect of technology.
Actually, traditional culture is an antecedent that people believe is the right thing which they should follow. For example, females should remain pure or not allow males to touch their bodies easily and should not wear sexy clothes; however, the internet is one path that helps break this sensible notion because they can upload their pictures in the buff to show others. I have heard the reason why people dare to do this as it is just a picture shown on the monitor and they do not know who can see the picture, so they do not have a reason to be shy.
Furthermore, respect from students is a beautiful habit. Nonetheless, in this day and age education is developed by technology until teachers are not necessary today because there are several ways to get knowledge without asking the teacher. For instance, in the past teachers were needed in the learning process in classroom, so obedience was an important quality which students had to show in order to gain knowledge
The teacher was the only one who could give knowledge. Yet today, there are several articles of knowledge on the internet. Therefore, teachers are not important anymore and student will go to school or university to pick up their degrees. This is a reason why students do not respect the teacher
These problems are as a result of technology, so technology and traditional culture run parallel. Humanity can cope with only one of them.
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IELTS Examiner’s Comment:
your essay should not be about vocab. It should be clear and have developed ideas supported with clear examples. Your 2nd and 3rd body paragraphs are closely connected and should be together. Slowly go over the corrections and learn from your mistakes. Go back to basic language and start building your essay from that. Good luck!