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Computer can easily do all the basic and advanced calculations. Do you think your children should spend more time learning basic mathematics or advanced computer technology? Give your view no less than 250 word.
The calculator has undoubtedly been a genius invention. There are several benefits of this technology that helps by reducing the time needed for calculating. However, a mathematics subject is still important for every child to develop their logical thinking. This essay will examine the reason and advantage for which students should study the basic and advanced calculations.
In my view, the basic processes of the human brain is divided into two sides: analysis and memory. The memory part is developed in a natural way, such as processing memories of their parents’ faces and names; studying communication in language is an ability which relates to this memory part. In contrast, the other side of the brain is not developed by itself. As a result of one’s childhood period, there is not an activity that relates to the analysis part. Therefore, calculations in mathematics are quite important to improve one’s analytical ability of students.
In addition, the benefit of knowing the process of calculation is that not only can people calculate numbers in life, there are several other advantages of it. For example, a skill solving problem is another advantage of studying this subject. Students are trained to solve a mathematic problem every day in school. There are both easy and difficult problems in lessons; thus, trying to solve the problem is a way to establish a habit for children to not give up on problems easily. In real life, these children will grow up to be valuable citizens in the future.
In my opinion, although students have to spend more time to study the basics of calculations in their childhood, there are more benefit for students in the future; thus, they should not cut this lesson out of a child’s life.
Estimate Band Score : 6.0
IELTS Examiner Comment:
This essay has multiple errors in every line that you need to review. You have tried to include complex sentences, which is great, and I am happy with your efforts in this regard. Use real examples from your life (or some else’s life) and include them next time. It would require past tense and make the essay a little more personable. But first, review your grammar mistakes and work hard on improving them. A higher score will come soon!