มาพบกับเฉลยงานเขียน BAND 7.0 กันนะคะ ในหัวข้อยอดฮิตจาก Cambridge IELTS นะคะ Marriage and Divorce ค่ะ
Reference: IELTS BAND 7.0 ตัวอย่าง Writing TASK 1
The bar chart illustrates the number of American people who were married and divorced over a 30–year period from 1970, with another bar chart providing the percentages of those marital statuses in 1993 and 2000. As can be seen, American citizens got married more than having annulled a marriage.
It is noticeable that there was a steady fall of marriages from 2.5 million to 2 million between 1980 and 2000. Nevertheless, divorces increased over the first decade and then slightly decreased ending in 2000 at approximately 1 million. Moreover, for each decade, the figure of marriages was around double that of divorces.
In the two of the years, there were two marital-status trends of the Americans; upward and downward. As With regards to the former, the proportion of divorced people rose approximately threefold from 1990 to 2000. Likewise, the trend for the never married people was upward. By contrast, the proportions of the married and widowed are individuals marginally dropped by around 10% and 2% respectively.
Overall, the primary status of people in the US was marriage that of living as couples bound by marriage.
Estimate IELTS Band Score : 7.0
IELTS Examiner Comment : this is very good task 1. You really re-phrased well and as you can see there are just a few minor errors. I would suggest a more comprehensive ‘overall observation’ because it must incorporate both bar charts. More nouns could have been used: ‘ divorces’ , ‘widowers’, ‘spinsters’, etc.