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Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not alternatives to natural environment. Discuss some of arguments against <– You can’t discuss both sides. keeping animals in zoos.
Zoos are the most attractive places from in my childhood days; however, are they interchangeable with natural jungles? Some people are of the opinion that we can confine wild life in the zoos, whereas some argue that nature is overly sophisticated to too complex simulate. This essay will express both upsides and the downsides of this debatable issue zoos.
On the plus side, the zoos play an important role in the wildlife conservation. Enormous creatures, in this day and year age, are on the edge brink of extinction. Fortunately, according to an advanced zoology and technology, an artificial fertilization is possible, which is able to conserve a huge number array of breeds creatures. An instance illustrating this into action, there were is when several beautiful birds in Japan which were endangered since the zoologists where protected successfully protected them by having putting them into a breeding program. Moreover, children can enjoy learning to appreciate various kinds of wildlife.
Apart from the benefits, wildlife does not have enjoy freedom. In zoos in my opinion, even a small insect deserves freedom, and we have no right to deprive its. By limiting space, the animals easily undergo psychological problems such as depression, or even miss their home. Finally, it indirectly kills the creatures on the grounds that they are unable to live in a genuine forest. [ Let’s imagine how can a tame lion, which is polite but does not know how to feed itself, survive in a tropical forest?]ß So zoos are good ?
With all things taken into account, it is necessary to keep the animals which are on the verge of extinction in the zoos. Meanwhile, we should let go of others, and care about the of impacts on the confined animals.
(Estimate IELTS Band Score: 5.0)
IELTS Examiner Comments: Student, this should be a one – sided argumentative essay with two or three main body paragraphs to argue why zoos are bad. Your conclusion is unclear, and although your writing has grammatical merit, it fails at clarity in the end. Make sure you address the question and don’t stay away from it in any way.