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Some authors believe that urbanization is a “modern Disease”. In no less than 250 words explain if you agree with this view and give your own opinion
Some people satisfy to live in a developing city, as there are several high-technologies to support their lifestyle such as sky train, department store, internet system and etc. In contrast, nowadays there is a dramatic rise in the number of patient in big city and the number will increase continually. This situation is occurred by technology or some people call is “a modern disease”. So is technology really good for people? This essay will elaborate the word “ modern disease” and attend my opinions into essay.
In my view, I divide the main point of modern disease out two points are health and human mental. Firstly, health is affected by air pollution in town. There are several factors why air pollution in urban area is more than rural area. For example carbon dioxide is a one factor to make people get a cancer and almost machines are developed by technology will produce this gas in their process , such as smoke from exhaust pipe. But this problem won’t be a big problem if there is a huge of green area which is occupied by tree. Notwithstanding, most of green area in city is developed by investor. Although the government issues law to protect green area but it’s not enough if compare with the percentage of air pollution in city
In addition, it’s not only health of people is affect by technology. Human mental is another thing which is affected too. Routine of people in big city is always be rush hour, everyone has to hurry since they wake up in the morning to avoid against a terrible traffic in city. This is a reason why citizen pressure by stress which destroy their happiness in everyday.
Consequently, technology in the developing city is the reason for diseases to citizen. And they can’t avoid with these diseases if stilling stay in the city.
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