กลับมาพบกับเฉลยงานเขียน IELTS ใน Task 1 สำหรับหัวข้อ The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. ใครที่ยังไม่มีโอกาสลองเขียนมาส่ง ลองกลับไปดูกันได้ที่
The map shows the Garlsdon town which has a population of 65 thousand and two
possible areas of a supermarket, demonstrated as S1 and S2.
Looking first at the one in the north-west, represented as S1, a this proposed supermarket will be situated in Garlsdon countryside which is near to its housing zone and has a would be in close proximity to a main road and a railway passing through the city center. Moreover, customers from Hindon, with a 10,000 population of 10,000, could also travel by road with which is 12 kilometres long.
On the other hand, S2 is planned to be constructed in the town center, which may be
more crowded, but residents could only be accessible access by train cause since there is no main road to reach this site. In addition, it is close to Bransdon which has 15 thousand population inhabitants and is just 16 kilometres far from Garlsdon. Residents (29 thousand) of another neighboring town, Cransdon, can probably come by cars but it is not convenient enough since it will take too long travelling with to 25 – kilometres far away distance.
Overall, we can see that these two sites have different features, S1 is more convenient
for travelers customer who can use cars or trains, but there is no other towns nearby. In contrast, S2 is in the town center but clients shoppers have touse the railway to get there cause because it is in a car-free zone.
Estimate IELTS Band Score : 6.5
IELTS Examiner’s Comments :
Student, the tenses are good and as you can see, there are not too many errors. Go through them and learn from them. You are also rephrase a little vocabulary and you have a good overall observation. The types of errors You’ve made keep this task below band 7, but you are done well.
IELTS Institute Team