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It is inevitable that as technology develops so tradition culture must be lost. Technology and tradition are compatible-you can have both together. To what extend do you agree with this statement?
In the globalised worlds, it is undeniable that modern technology has been advanced continuously while traditional cultures has been disappeared consecutively. Some people claim that modern technology and tradition culture are both harmoniouscan co-exist. However, from my perspective, modern technology infiltration in every aspects of human’s life and cannot conform to tradition culture that had has been gradually vanishing from our society.
First and foremost, technology is regarded as a fundamental factor for the development of a country as a whole. If the government has practical policies to support the use of technology, it is obviously inevitable that its country will have an opportunity to go on the fast track. For example, Japan, which was devastating devastated and traumatic traumatized after World War 2 two, had been rehabilitating extremely fast due to the advancement to technology such as that lead toelectric trains, electric appliances, cars, mobile phones, and efficient factories. In the 1960s, Japan’s economic grown up immediately grew rapid rapidly in spite of losing a great deal of money spent in aon themilitary term. The Japanese government focused on the improvement of the country more the preservation of tradition culture. Therefore, some tradition cultures have had been ignored from Japanese society in order to create new technology for improving to become an authority in thea challenging world.
In addition, traditions culture is deemed as an obstacle to establish the a new modern world’s society. For example Thailand, which was changed to the becomeademocratic country in 1932, has been confronting problems of rebuilding our society to be more modern in order to be equivalent match to western nation since 19th century. The‘Jongkraben uniform”, which is Thais a Thai’ traditional uniform, was one of the most remarkable visualobstacles for our developing society because people wearwearing used to wear it about 100 years ago, so it was instilled in their minds. However, modern technology from western nation intermittently crept flew into Thailand. As a result, The Thai government had a hard time to manage modern technology to get along with the old traditional
With all things considered, having modern technology along with traditional culture cannot be harmonious, From where I stand, a country, which is successful to manage itself to become ‘a developed country’, have has to purpose onforthe advancement of technology because it is the key for success in the globalised world.
(Estimate IELTS Band Score: 6.5)
IELTS Examiner Comments
As you can see, there are a lot of small errors. Having said that, you really tried to incorporate various tenses and real examples. That is what you must do on the exam, so good work! I suggest you go over your little errors and try to improve on your accuracy with there. Overall, this is good.