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The only way to prevent overcrowding in cities is to prevent migration from rural areas. How far do you agree?
At present, many large cities throughout the world have to confront with overcrowding. Most countries set this issue to be the national problem that needs immediate actions as overcrowding leads to many negative effects on society; for example, insufficient resources, pollution, crime , and so on. Some people suggest that prevention of migration from rural areas is the only way to solve the problem. Nevertheless, there are several applicable ways to tackle overcrowding in cities.
To begin with, family planning agencies should be assigned to each community. As we all know that even if family is the smallest unit, it has significant influence on our society, especially in the number of population. According to this, family planning agencies have vital role in providing practical advices to families; for instance, the number of child that each family can nurture, the right ways to bring up a child, and others. Moreover, family planning agencies can uphold an authority by offering the information about the form of the families in their responsible areas and the approximate number of population, which can be used to manage overcrowding in each city.
Furthermore, the heavy industries should be encouraged to locate their plants in suburban or rural areas, rather than in the middle of cities. Setting up factories in suburban or rural areas is not only offering employments to the people in upcountry, but it is also a brilliant practice to resolve overcrowding in capital cities.
To sum up, in my point of view, obviation migration from rural areas is not the only one possible way to address overcrowding in cities. Establishing family planning agencies and setting up heavy industries’ plants in suburban or rural areas are other possible methods to solve the problem.
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