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สำหรับสัปดาห์นี้เป็นหัวข้อเกี่ยวกับ equality and personal success นะคะ มาติดตามกันเลยดีกว่าค่ะ
In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
In recent decades, a gap between egalitarian societies and personal success has enlarged and it seems to be unstoppable. Although some people think that they should focus on their personal goals, other individuals might consider that the same rights and same opportunities would bring about the long live benefits to our societies. In my opinion, I strongly agree that people can achieve more in this equal societies.
On the one hand, the egalitarian societies lead to many advantages to every person particularly poor people. For one thing, the number of uneducated people has rose rapidly since the last decade. Due to poverty, they lack opportunities to learn. Take African children as example, they only have a day to day plan and cannot imagine how they get a chance to study in schools. In additional, the same right is another basic thing that creates equal opportunities. Each person has own vision to develop their communities by voting. Burma is a prime example, after all Burmese obtain their right to vote from military ,Burma then become the open country with the giant leap of economy in the ASEAN. This kind of equality would ensure the success of many citizens.
On the other hand, I would argue that equal rights and opportunities are not affect with people’s freedom to succeed or fail. Firstly, I believe that most people would feel happier and more confident to work if they are success in the fair communities. In contrast, those who achieve their lives by taking advantages from others are never be reach real success. Furthermore, social enterprise is a new career that can achieve both personal and social benefit .For instance, Dr. Muhamus Yunus who received noble prize from initiating bank for poor by giving microfinance service named Grameen Bank. Poor people can get a personal loan without requiring collateral leading to sustainable careers in Bangladesh.
All things considered, personal success and equality can be together. From my perspective, this brings about many benefits to our communities.
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