สำหรับเฉลยในครั้งนี้เป็นของหัวข้อก่อนหน้าในเรื่องของ Young drug abuse ซึ่ง IELTS Examiner แนะนำว่าเป็นหัวข้อที่ออกข้อสอบมาในทุกยุคทุกสมัยเลยนะคะ ยังไงน้องๆที่กำลังเตรียมสอบ ielts อย่าลืมไปลองฝึกเขียนกันนะคะ ใครยังไม่ได้ลองตามไปดูหัวข้อได้ที่ลิ้งค์ด้านล่างเลยค่ะ
One cannot deny that the number of adolescents who are involved in drugs is on the increase in many nations. Unfortunately, they often do not see the link between their actions today and the consequences tomorrow. This essay will outline the causes and the feasible solutions toin respondse to them.
The first and foremost cause is thea lack of closeness in families. As an For instance, many parents have less contact with their children and less energy to enjoy family activities such as eating meals together. Children may be left alone or with babysitters so and loose the bond with family, there can be a lot of conflict between teenagers and their parents. Providing when they face some dilemmas, they may use drugs in order to reduce stresses.
Secondly, adolescence is a time for trying new thing. Teens who feel like they do not fit in or are out of the mainstream will experiment with illegal drugs and stop, or continue to use occasionally including especially at birthday parties in Thailand. Others may turn to other serious addictions. Finally, it It is easy to buy illegal drugs, especially near schools, pubs, and so on.
One possibility is for parents to be positive role models for children, make keep a close eye on contact with their behavior and raise their awareness of drug abuse. Another step is for the government to introduce an enforce laws. Perhaps they should provide drug rehabilitation treatment center to help those affected by drugs. By doing this, the number of young drug abusers will decrease.
All in all, both governments and families must play their parts in looking after the youth as they are valuable citizens in every country.
(IELTS Band Score: 6.0)
IELTS Examiner’s Comments: this is a very good essay with not too many serious errors. In terms of vocab, you score highly but with respect to grammar difficulty, you have played it very safe. We need to see perfect tenses (for this topic) and past tenses using real examples from your life. Take a greater risk with tenses if you wish for a higher score. Good luck!
IELTS institute Team