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(IELTS 8 – Test 4 -Task2) In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.
For several decades, the average weight of citizens in several countries around the globe has been rising on the rise and their physical health and strength have been reducing suffered. Eating a lot of food without calculating calories that the body can burn and lacking of exercise are the main causes of these issues; however, these problems can be mitigated by increasing certain expenses for overweight people.
First of all, everyone will gain weight if they consume too much food without working out. Normally, a person needs about 2000 calories per day. If he or she cannot use all of them, the remaining energy is changed to the fat and then it is accumulated in his or her body; therefore, his or her weight is increased. Furthermore, the exercise is one of the methods assisting people in burning energy and making them healthy and strong. If a consumer an individual exercises too less not enough, some calories are remained are not consumed; as a consequence, it makes him fat as well. For instance, when I was young, I was obese because I liked eating a lot of junk food. Moreover, I didn’t like playing any sports because I felt very tired while I was studying physical courses. During that time, my health was bad and I needed to eat take some medicines. Next, a A doctor advised me to swim and then my body was better improved. At present, not only am I slim, but I also love swimming.
In addition, increasing prices on the products or services for overweight individuals can solve these issues. When some expenses are increased, fat people realize why they must pay more for goods and services more than other people. This leads them to reduce their weights until they feel they are not taken advantage of. Take Samar airline, one of the USA airlines, as a good example,. tThe cost of airfare for passengers’ Samar depends on their weights. The more they lose lower their weights, the cheaper less they pay.
In conclusion, having a lot of food and lacking of exercise are main factors that why people’s weights are increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. Pricing the products and services following customers’ weights can mitigate these problems.
(Estimate IELTS Band Score 6.5)
IELTS Examiner‘s Comment:
There are some simple repeating errors which you can easily fix. The good point is you development in your paragraphs. There are also various tenses used. I would add more opinion after your example in the second body paragraph. Keep up the good work!