คราวที่แล้วพี่ได้นำหัวข้อเรื่อง Tourism ที่น่าสนใจมาฝากกัน ไม่รู้มีน้องๆส่งงานเขียน IELTS Writing เข้ามากันบ้างไหม วันนี้พี่ขอนำเฉลยและคำแนะนำดีๆจาก IELTS Examiner มาฝากกันนะคะ ส่วนใครที่ยังไม่เคยเขียนไปดูหัวข้อ Writing คราวที่แล้วได้จากหัวข้อด้านล่างนี้เลยค่ะ
หัวข้อ IELTS Task 2 : เรียน IELTS Writing กับหัวข้อเกี่ยวกับการท่องเที่ยว
Topic : Tourism is a multibillion dollars industry that supports economic development, some people think that it causes damage to local environment and culture, and what is your opinion?
At present, it is undeniable that tourism is one of the major industries which can lead to an optimum yield profitable source of income for some countries. However, some people generally believe that it has several negative effects on the local environment and culture. Even though travelling to another continent has certain negative effects, the benefits, from my point of view, far out weight outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin with, regarding to the economic aspect, the tourism industry is of a great important for some countries. The income generated by overseas visitors is substanctial. In a country such as Thailand, For example, foreign income from tourism is essential in helping to develop the nation. According to the fact that tTourism can attract investment from various organizations ranging from government, domestic companies, and multi-national companies, which can create employment owning to the demand for producing goods and services. Consequently, it is clear that not only does it help to improve the standard of living, but also distributes revenue into local communities.
Apart from the financial aspect, foreign visitors also provide a new perspective for the local people. Foreign languages and culture can help expand the minds of local people. Although some say that this can cause the erosion of the local traditions and environment, I apparently, by this way, people from other side of the world can exchange their culture and understand the way of life in the country they have visited better for instance, foreign tourists who visit Thailand love to see thai traditional performances and its rich culture. Some even to speak Thai and dress in Thai traditional style.
In conclusion, despite some negative impact, foreign tourists can help sustain and improve a nation’s economy with the an awareness of environmental and cultural value, tourism can surely bring about great prospects to the countries for a nation. (Taking account of *Taking stock of the advantages mentioned above, why don’t the governments promote a the tourism sector in each country ) ?
* To take stock (of something) is to think carefully about a situation and form an opinion about it, so that you can decide what to do
(Estimate IELTS Band Score: 6.0)
IELTS Examiner Comments: Clearly, you’ve got a good hold of English and there are very few errors. However, your essay loses marks from an over-reliance of formulaic structures/chunks of language which are merely memorized. Use real examples to support your ideas in past tenses as I feel you just scratch the surface of the topic.
IELTS Institute Team