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The human race is facing problems which are getting more acute as time gone on. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
At present, it is generally believed that we are confronting various of problems which are seem to be severe more and more severe. People around the world are killed by natural disasters which frequently emerge occur in many countries. In addition, unknown diseases occurred break out in some parts of the world. People, therefore, die without remedies. This essay [ will discuss these miserable problems. ] <– (does not address the question diredly)
Firstly, natural disasters normally occur for decade such as earthquakes and tidal waves. If these calamities happen, thousands of humans will die:; not only do people lose their families, but governments also spend many billions on economic reconstructions. Take Japan as an example, there was a powerfully nine magnitude nine earthquake which caused great loss of life, severe economic problems, and massive movements of citizens in Japan. After the first tremor, there was an aftershock with a magnitude of 6.5 which struck the surrounding areas of the epicenter. Then, a ten-metre tsunami, tidal waves, hit the south of Thailand resulting in my cousins who traveled to Phuket, southern area, at that time died to perish from these natural disasters.
Furthermore, fatal diseases are rising rapidly despite medical advances, particularly strange diseases which is are incurable. Some people contract dreadful diseases such as AIDS and cancer which is difficult to cure and cause death. Apart from that, several unknown diseases happen in some countries such as SARS; it initially occurred in China bringing doctors and scientists to astonishingly greatly doubt about the causes and treatments of this diseases. Many people who were infected with SARS will certainly die instantly unfortunately pass away because it is incurable. Moreover, I heard from the news that the rate of people dying from fatal diseases is increasing dramatically around the world.
In conclusion, many calamities caused by natures and diseases are more extremely severe leading to individuals to directly face distresseding incidents.
Estimate IELTS Band Score : 6.5
IELTS Examiner’s Comments : Your grammar and vocabulary, including punctuation, are excellent. There are just minor oversights here and there. However, you must answer the question directly and I’m not convinced. You’ve done that. Do more earthquakes happen now than in the past? If so, prove it by giving evidence. Plan your answer and check the question throughout writing the essay to stay on course.
IELTS Institute Team