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The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in the most of the world’s cities can be attributed directly to the rapid increasing number of private cars in use, discuss possible way to encourage the use of public transport.
In present day, many countries are seriously concerning concerned about congestion and pollution problems and the mainly factor is the considerable increasing increase in use of private cars. This essay will examine some feasible methods to persuade people to use public transport instead.
To solve these problems, encouraging people to change their daily travelling habit to use public transport is the most effective way. There are some persuasive measures that can convince individual to use less personal cars less often. Firstly, the government should provide enough and comfortable public transport such as sky train and buses. For example, locals station and time table should be expanded wide and increasing frequent the frequency of trips are is very important to avoid the over loading of people in each trip train or bus and ensures those commuters can get to a destination as much convenient as possible. Furthermore, funds should be allocation in order to make these service cheaper and more reliable. People would, consequently tend to use more public services rather than drive driving themselves.
Additionally, drivers should be required to pay a congestion fee for every car going into entering a the city centre it would force implicitly financially force people to use public transport more often than individuals’ car in order to sore their expenses. For instance, in the city of London drivers have to pay 8 eight pounds if they entry the centre of the city. Therefore, if people feel that this fee is a dispensable expense, they will would avoid to spending this by not driving into the city.
To sum up, if government provides an appropriate public transport as well as charge a congestion fee is required, these it would encourage people to commute by public transport rather than their own cars. By introduction such measure and result, it would be decrease level of traffic jams and bad pollution.
Estimate IELTS Band Score : 6.5
IELTS Examiner’s Comments : This is a very solid essay. There is a good variety of grammar and organization. What you work need to work on now is vocabulary. Add more adjectives (multiple) and adverbs to be descriptive. That is the main factor keeping your score below a band 7. Good effort.
IELTS Institute Team