กลับมาพบกับเฉลยงานเขียน IELTS ในส่วนที่ 2 สำหรับหัวข้อ external appearance judgement กันนะคะ ใครที่ยังไม่มีโอกาสลองเขียนมาส่ง ลองกลับไปดูกันได้ที่
Generally, individuals prefer to participate with be around people with a gorgeous look appearance such as an adorable face, shapely body, expensive accessories and others. However, it is not a the main factor to judge that what kind of person they are. From my perspective, I totally agree with the aforementioned statement and this essay will ensure my idea. aim to justify my view.
To start with, physical appearance cannot one’s identify financial status. In last week, I met an a scruffy man elder wearing old outfit and rubber slippers while I was queuing in the bank. He surprisingly withdrew a large amount of money. This case illustrates that millionaires may wear an inexpensive clothes since they do might not pay attention to fashion. Moreover, he spends money only to necessary equipment on necessities and property which can gain profit in the future.
Furthermore, the external expression is not related with their to one’s inner heart. People who smile sweetly and say greetings may envy your be after your job achievement. This type of person can be found a lot in often this day and age. By the way, some are while others lookings arrogant and unfriendly. In contrast, When you try to make a relation with them the latter, they may be very kindly and honest that is not similar to unlike the former group.
All things taken into consideration (for discursive essay.), I would like to reiterate that we cannot judge a book by its cover. The External appearance is not the significant parameter primary facet to judge one’s personality. We should take more time to estimate them deeplyget to know a person. Hence, we will must not be misleading by their one’s outer character appearance.
Estimate IELTS Band Score : 5.0
IELTS Examiner’s Comments: Your essay needs more idea development. Either add more examples or rephrase using expressions like “In other words”, “As a matter of fact”, “In fact”, etc. Write quickly and aim for more content. Your conclusion had also way too many errors for the message to be clear.
IELTS Institute Team