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Explain some of the ways in which human are damaging the environment. What can government do to address these problems? What can individual people do?
In this day and age, humans play as important role in the environment. Many people believe that humans are the main case in destroying it. Therefore, this essay will describe the ways that humanity impacts on nature and what government and individuals can do to tackle our careless and irresponsible behaviour.
Someone (who?) My geography teacher once said “humans are destroyers in everything surrounding them”. It seems to me that it is probably true nowadays. From this attitude, humanity has an high demands in everthing that. They want comforts regardless of the harmful effect on other lives in the world. They have transformed the environment surrounding them to become a facility for their convenience .Many cases that illustrate this are the deforestation for building residential zones, consuming oil stripped from the earth for transportation, killing wildlife for feeding themselves and so on. These activities have ruined the environment for long time.
It is inevitable that both governments and individuals have to take a responsibility for all effects on the environment. Firstly, governments should impose laws to regulate citizens who damage those natural resources. Moreover, it should give a severely punishment to them in order to protect our resources. Meanwhile as citizens, everyone should abide by the law and cooperate with their government for the conservation of the remaining surroundings. Indeed, I fell that one is more effective action than government because in many cases in exterminating the environment is destroyed by people living near it. In addition, if governments educates their residents well about the value of surroundings, those won’t damage it without a case.
It is certainly true that humans are destroyer, but, on the contrary, humans are able to bring the ecosystem back to life in our environment. Therefore, I personally take the view that it is not too late for everyone in society, including governments to protect our mother Earth for future generations.
Estimate IELTS Band Score: 6.0
IELTS Examiner Comments: besides some rather simple vocabulary, your essay is well-developed and full of good content and grammatical structures. I suggest you add more descriptive words like adjectives and adverbs to give your writing more “feeling from the heart.” Don’t use the word “thing” in your writing. Use more linking language (although, despite, as a matter of fact, …)