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In today’s world, it is undeniable that a large proportion of the population is influenced by the media in many ways. Therefore, entertainers earn enormous incomes because of this effect. Some people believe that they deserve every penny but others disagrees with this statement. This essay will examine both sides of this controversial issue and my opinion will be provided.
There is satisfaction in many people to spend huge amounts on their super star heroes because they admire the entertaining abilities of those celebrities. This population believes that amusement is very significant for their lives during and after their hectic schedules. In addition, they are inspired by some megastars to improve their lives for living in a luxurious place like their role models. Looking into biographies of celebrities, their lives are not trouble-free because they have to cope with many unexpected situations and also the door of career opportunity is not very wide; hence, the high qualifications are required from them such as Bruce lee, Brad Pitt, Leona Lewis (ß what are they abilities??) and so on. The media will support well for the entertainers well who have unique abilities. Therefore, they justify well earned fir their worthy living. (ß unclear)
Nonetheless, some members of the public think that a professor career should be paid higher than a super star as professionals are well educated and full of knowledge. In addition, they sharpen their skills for serving the public like doctors, nurses, teachers, soldiers and so on. According to a commentator who is well-known in Thailand, such professions are worthy of highly incomes because of their service to the public.
I strongly believe that celebrities are entitled to receive huge incomes because of their qualification and they are supported by the media by the empowering of advertisements. Furthermore, new generations are motivated to be outstanding citizens in many ways by many superior entertainers. For example, my friend who is inspired by Leona Lewis (a British world class singer so he has followed in her footsteps without uncertainty and is totally focused on his purpose. Nowadays, he is studying singing in the UK.
To sum up, I totally agree that it is appropriate for entertainers to obtain huge amounts of cash because of their expertise and media supporting. (ß unclear idea)Furthermore, they are not just entertaining but they also encourage, motivate and inspire people to be their best.
Estimated Band Score: Band 5.5
IELTS Examiner’s Comment:
There are still a lot of errors in this essay but the content is better. Keep expanding on your examples to support your opinion. More information was needed regarding other professions that should be paid more. Next time, add some past tense in your examples. But overall you are on the right path. Learn from your errors and keep improving.