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หัวข้อ IELTS Task 2 : ฝึกเขียน IELTS Writing หัวข้อ Changes
It is certain that there is nothing stable in ones lives life. Everything keeps changing every day for a wide an endless array of purposes. Some said they do not like change and prefer doing the same things in daily life while others think that a good thing in lives life comes from change. Both sides of the contrasting views will be outlined and also my opinion is given in this essay.
To begin with, change is a better way to try new way of lives living. Some people know what they like earlier early on while others do not. This is why the latter think change is always satisfying. They would like to find one something that suits for them. For example, my sister-in-law has changed her job many times until now. She did not know what she was really proficient in First, she loved cooking. She started cooking lessons with a well-known cook but she found that she does not have skills to be a good chef. After that, she knew herself discovered that she loved fashion. She started sewing lessons with a professional teacher. She started learning for but a few weeks then she felt bored. At present, she decides to make her runs her own business about D.I.Y. items around Siam Square and she really loves it. From my perspective, I reckon that this kind of individual will find that change is a good thing to find his or her way although it is not always good.
However, Some love repeated lives a cycle routine. Think change is unnecessary for them. When they goet what they needed already, there is nothing to change anymore. I think it is depends on individuals’ degree of satisfaction. Take my mother as an example, She is fond of a bowl of spicy noodles around her workplace. She said that she can eat that every day with the same manu. She has been eaten at this restaurant for fifteen years without feeling bored. She said she found what she found what she is favour of favours already, so why should she has have to change or try new ? Morever,
She loves clothes of Donna Karan, New York or DKNY. She has bought a lot of jeans till the be being awarded by salespersons set her as a having brand loyalty. I sometimes agree with my mother that when ones find what they really like, they do not have to change.
To sum up, I firmly believe that change is challenging. Individuals should try to do new things in order to find new chances and may those chances be their real needs. Although not time change is good, we know the result of that change and get used to do it.
(Estimate IELTS Band Score: 6.0)
IELTS Examiner Comments: This is not a bad essay but as you can see, there are quite a number of mistakes here and there. However, you have used examples and that is good. Your errors are centred around tenses, so review the tenses and aim for greater accuracy in this department.
IELTS Institute Team