Should poor countries continue to receive international aids?
Give your views in no less than 250 words.
In poor countries, such as Nigeria, South Africa, Zimbabwe or Ghana is the top of countries who are infected in Aids. Many postgraduate research in United Kingdom and United States that shown the cause of disease aids in undeveloped countries, also Aids is the leading cause of dead in poor countries. In the next section I will tell you about my ideas. Why in poverty-countries are infected Aids increasing every years.
Firstly, one cause of infection of Aids in South Africa zone, because in this zone have not been campaign to use condoms as much So then, The government problem about Aids in their countries should be interests in this problem to encourage your people come to use condoms more than present. If you do not, The Infection of Aids in your countries must be increasing and that will be a big problem in many poor countries.
Furthermore, the education in poor countries is another problem and this is a most important, because the education will makes people to have more knowledge about Aids and also the people will learn “how to protect yourself from Aids“ . The education is a most important in developing countries as The United States because everybody in these countries believed that the education can makes people to avoid from bad thing and improve opportunity to be a good life in future.
In my views, everybody must be interesting in problem of Aids and co-operate to teach everybody in poor countries or the countries that are infected with Aids. In fact, the international Aids problem can be resolve if everyone can make a difference and should try.
Poor countries, such as Nigeria, South Africa, Zimbabwe or Ghana, are the top countries whose people are infected with AIDS. Many postgraduate researches in the United Kingdom and the United States have shown the cause of AIDS in undeveloped countries. AIDS is also the leading cause of death in poor countries. This essay will examine the reasons why the number of people infected with AIDS in poverty stricken countries is increasing every year.
Firstly, one cause of infection of Aids in South Africa is because in this zone they have not had a campaign to use condoms as much. So, the government in these countries should be interested in this problem to encourage their people to use condoms more than present. If they do not, the infection of AIDS in their countries is likely to be increasing, and that will be a big problem in many poor countries.
Furthermore, the education in poor countries is another cause, and this is one of the most important. This is because the education will make people have more knowledge about AIDS, and also people will learn “how to protect yourself from AIDS”. Education is also very important in developed countries, such as the United States. Most people believe that the education can make people avoid the bad things, and there will be an opportunity to have a good life in the future.
In my view, everybody should be interested in the problem of AIDS, and co-operate to teach people in poor countries, or the countries that are infected with AIDS. In fact, the international AIDS problem can be resolved if everyone can work together to overcome the problem.
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